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Friday 29 August 2014

Narrative Writing

This is the narrative story that Kereama, Loni, Marsel, Cavhyon and Kraven all wrote together based on our sea description writing.

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Terry the Turtle and Cleo Clownfish.

Cleo wants to go to the concert to see Miley Starfish.  

In the morning before lunch.

This narrative story takes place at the bottom of the ocean in Bikini Bottom at a high school.

The cause of this problem is that Cleo wants to ditch school and go to Miley Starfish’s concert.

Cleo the Clown Fish is feeling excited and happy because she wants to go to  Miley Starfish’s concert, Terry the turtle is feeling upset because he doesn't want Cleo to go to the Miley Starfish concert he wants her to stay at school and make the right choice.

Cleo sneaks out of school anyway, leaving Terry behind wondering why she is going. He feels sad and doesn’t know whether to tell his teacher or not. He doesn’t want to tell on his best friend but he doesn’t want to see her get into even bigger trouble if she gets caught.
He slowly walks to his classroom deciding he has to tell an adult, when all of a sudden, Cleo slaps him on the shell, smiling. Terry is surprised to see her and she tells him that he was right and she can’t ditch school, she doesn’t want to disappoint her family.
They walk into class together still being the best of best friends.

The problem is solved by Cleo the Clown Fish coming back to school and not going to Miley Starfish’s concert 
she wants to wait until she is older,  Terry is happy that she came to the right decision and stayed at school.



1 comment:

Ms Aireen said...

This is a very interesting, narrative story Loni. I like how you have tried your best to use the TOPS structure to help you write this story. You have described a very positive message in your story about making the right choices which is seen through the character's actions.

Keep remembering to proofread your work. Well done for working hard to write this story this week with Kelly.

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